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Thread started 03/03/03 3:51pm

chickengrease

Please critique my tracks

These are all instrumentals. Any feedback would be appeciated. Keep in mind that all of these were created on a 4 tracks unedited with mistakes...just ideas in progress.

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[This message was edited Fri Mar 7 15:51:49 PST 2003 by chickengrease]
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Reply #1 posted 03/03/03 4:22pm

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if you have them in a wav format already, use musicmatch jukebox - it's free. (musicmatch.com)

if you don't have them captured on your computer yet, (in digital form) you'll need some sound software.

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Reply #2 posted 03/07/03 3:52pm

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Reply #3 posted 03/07/03 4:03pm

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These are 4-track!? I'm impressed right out the gate that you got all this on a 4-track. Good mix - sounds very full (if not a little flat, but that's from the 4-track, I'm guessing.)

Soulpsyche...

I like this - the start is a lot redundant though. Were you writing these planning to add vocals later? I'm 1:20 into it and there's no vocals, except the backing "aaahhh"s. Whole lotta crescendos - might wanna pull back on those a bit, unless there's sposed to be vocals over them that you just haven't added yet. Ok - I got two minutes into it and stopped it to listen to the rest. If there's vocals in the songs - you GOTTA move them up.

Funk Jam 2

Hey I like this one too. Great key work. Sounds like a Controversy out-take, the way the bass has the envelope/flange thing going. I bet you could get somebody here to lay some vocals over this and you'd have a great song. This stuff is GREAT, but you NEED SOMETHING in there to make it a full song - vocals, or follow Paisley's lead and just have a tape of humping in there (heh - just kiddin ya, paisley).


Funk Jam 1

Another stone jam. Great.

- - -

Here's what I think. All of these are good, but without SOMETHING in them to change them from appetizers to main courses, people will miss these and not get all the way through them. Does that make sense? I listen to these three, and keep wanting SOMETHING to happen - lyrics, breaks, something in the dynamics maybe. But musically, this stuff is great. I can't imagine what you'd do with a good digital multi-track recorder.

Hell - i would LOVE to take these songs and expand on them - add my lyrics or guitar over them.


Okay, it's now the 4th time I've listened to Funk Jam #1. LOVE this groove.

[This message was edited Fri Mar 7 16:04:27 PST 2003 by otan]
[This message was edited Fri Mar 7 16:12:22 PST 2003 by otan]
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Reply #4 posted 03/07/03 4:18pm

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otan said:


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Here's what I think. All of these are good, but without SOMETHING in them to change them from appetizers to main courses, people will miss these and not get all the way through them. Does that make sense? I listen to these three, and keep wanting SOMETHING to happen - lyrics, breaks, something in the dynamics maybe. But musically, this stuff is great. I can't imagine what you'd do with a good digital multi-track recorder.

Hell - i would LOVE to take these songs and expand on them - add my lyrics or guitar over them.

You beat me to it. Exactly what I was about to say. The ballad is really good to play a guitar over with some distorted feedback type of thing, but I agree that the main phrase needs something else to happen, or a different sound to change it up.
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Reply #5 posted 03/07/03 4:19pm

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otan said:

These are 4-track!? I'm impressed right out the gate that you got all this on a 4-track. Good mix - sounds very full (if not a little flat, but that's from the 4-track, I'm guessing.)

Soulpsyche...

I like this - the start is a lot redundant though. Were you writing these planning to add vocals later? I'm 1:20 into it and there's no vocals, except the backing "aaahhh"s. Whole lotta crescendos - might wanna pull back on those a bit, unless there's sposed to be vocals over them that you just haven't added yet. Ok - I got two minutes into it and stopped it to listen to the rest. If there's vocals in the songs - you GOTTA move them up.

Funk Jam 2

Hey I like this one too. Great key work. Sounds like a Controversy out-take, the way the bass has the envelope/flange thing going. I bet you could get somebody here to lay some vocals over this and you'd have a great song. This stuff is GREAT, but you NEED SOMETHING in there to make it a full song - vocals, or follow Paisley's lead and just have a tape of humping in there (heh - just kiddin ya, paisley).


Funk Jam 1

Another stone jam. Great.

- - -

Here's what I think. All of these are good, but without SOMETHING in them to change them from appetizers to main courses, people will miss these and not get all the way through them. Does that make sense? I listen to these three, and keep wanting SOMETHING to happen - lyrics, breaks, something in the dynamics maybe. But musically, this stuff is great. I can't imagine what you'd do with a good digital multi-track recorder.

Hell - i would LOVE to take these songs and expand on them - add my lyrics or guitar over them.


Okay, it's now the 4th time I've listened to Funk Jam #1. LOVE this groove.

[This message was edited Fri Mar 7 16:04:27 PST 2003 by otan]
[This message was edited Fri Mar 7 16:12:22 PST 2003 by otan]



Thanks. I knew psychedelicsoulballad is too repetitive. I never got inspired to write lyrics to any of these and that first track dates back to 1998. Talk about writers block!. I would love to turn these over to you and hear the result.
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Reply #6 posted 03/07/03 5:08pm

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Dude I am ON that!

chickengrease said:

Thanks. I knew psychedelicsoulballad is too repetitive. I never got inspired to write lyrics to any of these and that first track dates back to 1998. Talk about writers block!. I would love to turn these over to you and hear the result.
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