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Reply #30 posted 06/17/04 3:33pm

2the9s

starkitty said:

2the9s said:



Wouldn't it make more sense if there was an awkward silence on the other end when John mentions shooting himself? Rather than "Paul yelling animatedly"?


oh that's great.

not sure how to word it but that's great, and much funnier.


hmm Are you playing with me?
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Reply #31 posted 06/17/04 3:42pm

starkitty

2the9s said:

starkitty said:



oh that's great.

not sure how to word it but that's great, and much funnier.


hmm Are you playing with me?


no, i dig it. really funny.

JOHN
I'd rather blow my head off.

(beat)

(awkward silence)

JOHN looks at the phone.

JOHN
Paul? You there?

(look of disbelief comes over JOHN's face)

JOHN
Oh my God.
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Reply #32 posted 06/17/04 3:43pm

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starkitty said:

2the9s said:



hmm Are you playing with me?


no, i dig it. really funny.

JOHN
I'd rather blow my head off.

(beat)

(awkward silence)

JOHN looks at the phone.

JOHN
Paul? You there?

(look of disbelief comes over JOHN's face)

JOHN
Oh my God.


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Reply #33 posted 06/17/04 3:45pm

doctormcmeekle

starkitty said:

Lleena said:

I'd like to read more Kitty.


that will be arranged! i'll note you when i'm finished. just started the 7th page, i'm expecting 10-15 (but it's a quick read). i'll note you when it's done.

Can you put Ringo in it?

smile
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Reply #34 posted 06/17/04 3:53pm

2the9s

Uh oh. They're both offline again...
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Reply #35 posted 06/17/04 4:43pm

bkw

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I think that the lack of nipples really lets this scene down. confused
When I read about the evils of drinking, I gave up reading.
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Reply #36 posted 06/17/04 4:49pm

NCC2012

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doctormcmeekle said:

starkitty said:



that will be arranged! i'll note you when i'm finished. just started the 7th page, i'm expecting 10-15 (but it's a quick read). i'll note you when it's done.

Can you put Ringo in it?

smile

Hey, if you put in Ringo, ya GOTTA have George, too. razz
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Reply #37 posted 06/17/04 6:06pm

starkitty

2the9s said:

Uh oh. They're both offline again...


get your mind out of the gutter.

heh.
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Reply #38 posted 06/17/04 6:08pm

TheFrog

(mind still in the gutter)

i think this is cool. especially with the re-write with the silence - that made me laugh.

one question though - i'm wondering whether or not this character wears sweatpants or not? neutral
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Reply #39 posted 06/17/04 6:09pm

starkitty

TheFrog said:

(mind still in the gutter)

i think this is cool. especially with the re-write with the silence - that made me laugh.

one question though - i'm wondering whether or not this character wears sweatpants or not? neutral


i say yay, to sweatpants with holes.
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Reply #40 posted 06/17/04 6:18pm

NWF

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Surely you don't mean these two, do you?

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Reply #41 posted 06/17/04 6:29pm

starkitty

oh boy.

no. not them. they aren't the only pauls and johns in existence.
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Reply #42 posted 06/17/04 10:27pm

vanillachild

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do english people say 'bloody' a lot?

i mean if you're english, would you say it peppers your conversation?
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Reply #43 posted 06/17/04 10:42pm

vanillachild

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i forgot, all the english are sleeping.

sigh.
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Reply #44 posted 06/18/04 2:40am

TheFrog

vanillachild said:

do english people say 'bloody' a lot?

i mean if you're english, would you say it peppers your conversation?


i think "fucking" has become much more common than bloody. people that do pepper what they say with swearwords tend to go the whole hog.

'bloody' is somewhat more reserved, and the type of people that use it aren't the sort of people with foul mouths in the first place.

he generalises. as always.
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Reply #45 posted 06/18/04 6:30am

Lleena

starkitty said:

Lleena said:

I'd like to read more Kitty.


that will be arranged! i'll note you when i'm finished. just started the 7th page, i'm expecting 10-15 (but it's a quick read). i'll note you when it's done.



Thankyou kitty

(btw, I like what you said on the Hottest female thread Kitty)
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Reply #46 posted 06/18/04 6:40am

starkitty

thanks lleena, i appreciate that.
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