"vex"
sitting in a daze with my stomach in knots..
'm stuck inside a phase wish forgot.
In the midst of this crowd, stand on edge..
My psyche unbowed, this man will never pledge.
As sulk, she comes and smiles.
She was once saw as beauty, 'm no longer beguiled.
Soon she begins 2 talk on the matter of why.
Vexed, reply wishing she would fly.
Never clever, she fails 2 read between the lines.
It's whatever, we could never combine.
So the truth, still can't accept.
Reason why, its beyond this depth.
Her words were once my own.
Foolish 2 believe my life she could hone.
5:45, 3 hours since she left.
The essence survives, crime being the perfect theft.
Robbery of my mind, 'm sure she has no clue.
've been battling this desire since her debut.
need her extinct from my brain;
Unhealthy thoughts foriegn as the country Spain..
crave 2 ignore emotions unreturned.
Plauge of deplore, surely 've learned..

why do you need to be rated?

syble said:

to get opinions on my art forms..why else?

I like the story telling aspect but that eye icon is too distracting for me.

Slave2daGroove said:

yea agreed

I agree^^^
the eye icon is a stumbling block.

After the 3rd read ,it does flow alot smoother.

How are we rating?