there i was just about to lick my fingers..... but wait i thought....

this is a head pat tummy rub song.....

its really good.... mr 08

the words at the start sound a bit clever for the
overall feel of everything..... but thats more me and my mind... so forget it..
I wonder how Tom Jones would get past that... ??? mmmmm

love the rippling waves of the chorus...
like you want something more to be
yet it would be futile to pursue
and so it must fade like waves
for a new splash n ripple
to squeezah a new nipple in the pond
of lovers dreams.... awwwww...

and its like you've almost worked
out that man cannot live by the
enticement of his pectoral muscles
and a cute smile.....

in deep...

Interesting arrangement. I like the drums a lot.

My favorite part of the song is the bridge. I think you sing in that style better than you do in the falsetto style.

Still waiting for feedback from Beau Hall and others...cough, cough.

artist08 said:

still waiting for the consult fee to be deposited into my paypal account.

1. The drums are pulling too much attention away from everything else. turn them down, or turn the bass and the vox up more, or simplify the pattern, turn down the hi-hats - something to pull away from them.
2. great singing as always. glad to hear an original coming out of you finally. 3. hey hey look at you mister backwards solo boy.

The song is good except that you're going way to far into 80's early tears for fears/cure land with the keys, which really dates the whole thing. I don't know if a different key patch would help, or maybe playing a different instrument entirely. Maybe switch out the drum kit for an 808 kit and push the retro thing even harder?

I suck at mixing and EQ-ing - well, mostly EQ-ing. The drums are just loops that I liked. I will remix with the bass louder. The keys are two separate tracks with weird effects and panned in the mix. Believe it or not, that was the sound I wanted, too! If you want to do the drums for me, I could send you all the tracks. Do you want to? I really want someone else to do it!

Thanks, as always, for your constructive feedback.
And more applause. It needs more applause.