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A poem of mine...Tell me what u think Even if u dont like it...let me know
LAST TEAR A tear goes through a lot before it lands In the midst of its drop Before it touches my hands It sees the world that gave it life And no longer hides It has a mind like me and a heart that will soon die With its last fall to never be seen again It remembers the struggle And the pain within Its last steps are priceless And shines like gold It knows it's the last of the hurting soul It unfolds the past and years of fear Confusion and heartache is what brought it here No more will the world see you my very last tear For you've taken your last step Your end is here [Edited 10/13/06 6:53am] | |
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I love it... Its so deep..... Thanx 4 sharing | |
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Lilith said: I love it... Its so deep..... Thanx 4 sharing
Thank You | |
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I'm gonna say "I dont like
it" just coz you said I can I do find that pulling a hair out of your nose can recreate pain and sometimes a tear... | |
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groovyiau said: I'm gonna say "I dont like
it" just coz you said I can I do find that pulling a hair out of your nose can recreate pain and sometimes a tear... lol cool thanks | |
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absolutely beautiful!! | |
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sexxydancer said: absolutely beautiful!!
Thank you sexxxydancer! I threw an extra x in ur name for that lol | |
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Thanx! 1 can never b 2 sexxxy! | |
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good use of personification
i honestly can't find anything wrong with it so thats def a good thing i think its great! I am a Rail Road, Track Abandoned
With the Sunset forgetting, i ever Happened http://www.myspace.com/stolenmorning | |
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DanceWme said: Even if u dont like it...let me know
LAST TEAR A tear goes through a lot before it lands In the midst of its drop Before it touches my hands It sees the world that gave it life And no longer hides It has a mind like me and a heart that will soon die With its last fall to never be seen again It remembers the struggle And the pain within Its last steps are priceless And shines like gold It knows it's the last of the hurting soul It unfolds the past and years of fear Confusion and heartache is what brought it here No more will the world see you my very last tear For you've taken your last step Your end is here [Edited 10/13/06 6:53am] I dig it. Very thoughful. | |
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EmbattledWarrior said: good use of personification
i honestly can't find anything wrong with it so thats def a good thing i think its great! | |
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Graycap23 said: DanceWme said: Even if u dont like it...let me know
LAST TEAR A tear goes through a lot before it lands In the midst of its drop Before it touches my hands It sees the world that gave it life And no longer hides It has a mind like me and a heart that will soon die With its last fall to never be seen again It remembers the struggle And the pain within Its last steps are priceless And shines like gold It knows it's the last of the hurting soul It unfolds the past and years of fear Confusion and heartache is what brought it here No more will the world see you my very last tear For you've taken your last step Your end is here [Edited 10/13/06 6:53am] I dig it. Very thoughful. | |
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It's a really nice poem and i encourage u 2 write more. | |
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BeneHaze said: It's a really nice poem and i encourage u 2 write more.
Thank you BTW, I have written lots more | |
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I like Purple Rain too! Read mine too in the forums under; org artist community. Look for, Whatever Happen to Fannie Mae? [Edited 10/23/06 18:55pm] | |
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Awesome~
Thanks for sharing~ Everytime I comb my hair
Thoughts of you get in my eyes... Vous etes tres belle... | |
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loisclark88 said: Awesome~
Thanks for sharing~ Thank u | |
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xcellent magery.
tasteful flow. DIFFERENT...and n the world of poetry it is hard 2 b DIFFERENT. eye have never felt a flava like urs b4. props 2 U. keep writing. "...and that sez what?" | |
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BackStagePass said: xcellent magery.
tasteful flow. DIFFERENT...and n the world of poetry it is hard 2 b DIFFERENT. eye have never felt a flava like urs b4. props 2 U. keep writing. thank u so much | |
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That was very deep. I can dig it!
LQ | |
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LadyQ said: That was very deep. I can dig it!
LQ | |
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