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My song! Please critique Hi. I finally found a site with people addicted to the funk just like me. Hard to find around people my own age (27). Anyways, I'm a writer/composer, entirely self-taught. Here's one of my songs, lyrics only. I haven't figured out how to put my music on here. Now I know that I'm not as lyrically proficient as his Purple Badness, but I try. Constructive critism is welcome (Please be kind. I'm fragile- ha ha ha). Actually, if it sucks, then say it sucks. Would'nt be any fun if everyone was PC. Thanks in advance.
Fast Cars Pretty Things Fast Cars Pretty Things Didn’t know my love had a price Movie stars Diamond rings And the fancy shit U don’t wear twice Always knew you wanted to make it in Hollywood But can’t act well enough for a silent role Don’t sing a lick but you know you look good So you decided that you would sell sell your soul For the (Chorus) Fast Cars Pretty Things Does it make you happy baby Really happy baby Fast Cars Pretty Things Come on back to me baby Come on back to me baby Fast Cars Pretty Things Got the world in the palm of your hand More paper in the bank than you had ever seen But being poor in love wasn’t part of the plan Can afford to buy anything your pretty little mind can think of But found out a big house don’t make a home You a freak too baby but when’s the last time U made love Can’t sex yourself out of feeling alone (Chorus) Bridge: U had it mama but U threw it away But found out the price of fame was too high to pay Whatcha gonna do baby Whatcha gonna do Better make up your mind before U blow away Go home baby, Go home little girl Come home baby, Come home little girl [Edited 10/18/05 14:36pm] [Edited 10/18/05 14:38pm] "You better not ever say an unkind word about the motherfuckin Time" Jay, from Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back. | |
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looks like a jam. now to hear it would be better. | |
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talmuzic said: looks like a jam. now to hear it would be better.
Thank you! Man, I'm not with the whole "upload your music thing" yet. It's hard bein broke baby. "You better not ever say an unkind word about the motherfuckin Time" Jay, from Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back. | |
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what equipment do u have? | |
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talmuzic said: what equipment do u have?
Um...none. I don't even know where to start. "You better not ever say an unkind word about the motherfuckin Time" Jay, from Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back. | |
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