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Honest opinions PLEASE... :fingerscrossed:
ok so i wrote this poem bout aids. not sure if i'm done with it yet, i'm always revising shit, but i'd like to have some opinions on it..Honest please, ok? if you think it sucks tell me ok? AIDS Its not an assistance or a curse its only a burden if u make it its not a thing that makes life worse life is only that way if u make it recieve with open arms this is ur life now no need to cry now believe in ur worth no need to die now if only u try now so what do yall think? Yesterday is dead...tomorrow hasnt arrived yet....i have just ONE day...
...And i'm gonna be groovy in it! | |
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sounds like a positive take on a unfortunate reality. | |
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It's good. I like it. | |
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 thank youYesterday is dead...tomorrow hasnt arrived yet....i have just ONE day...
...And i'm gonna be groovy in it! | |
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Moonwalkbjrain said: :fingerscrossed:
ok so i wrote this poem bout aids. not sure if i'm done with it yet, i'm always revising shit, but i'd like to have some opinions on it..Honest please, ok? if you think it sucks tell me ok? AIDS Its not an assistance or a curse its only a burden if u make it its not a thing that makes life worse life is only that way if u make it recieve with open arms this is ur life now no need to cry now believe in ur worth no need to die now if only u try now so what do yall think? That would mean alot and touch someone if they were dealing with it for the first time. Pretty good man. Straight Jacket Funk Affair
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paisleypark4 said: Moonwalkbjrain said: :fingerscrossed:
ok so i wrote this poem bout aids. not sure if i'm done with it yet, i'm always revising shit, but i'd like to have some opinions on it..Honest please, ok? if you think it sucks tell me ok? AIDS Its not an assistance or a curse its only a burden if u make it its not a thing that makes life worse life is only that way if u make it recieve with open arms this is ur life now no need to cry now believe in ur worth no need to die now if only u try now so what do yall think? That would mean alot and touch someone if they were dealing with it for the first time. Pretty good man. thank u!Yesterday is dead...tomorrow hasnt arrived yet....i have just ONE day...
...And i'm gonna be groovy in it! | |
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