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THIS VERY DAY... “This very day” Written by Singmia Draco
Notes playing on the piano… As the wind breaks thru the pane… The window of my journey… Brings the flowers from this rain… I can’t see the future…. Myself, but to know in others true… This Path of living seems to shine on love That bares this dawn to truth. If I could stop and ponder… Of the years I spoke to you… I guess I would have honored it more, As the goodbye was never viewed… And I don’t know what the future holds in store… My crystal ball unshined… I never ask those views… I always thought of destiny… Or the fate that would follow through. A good friend that I have missed for months… Upon the years, hold dear… And moments of great sadness… Because my friend is never near. I guess those words of wisdom… I shall take on with myself… It was far better to have heard them then.. To have never bared witness to this path… So if this lifetime there is no words… Then I guess what’s left to say… I truly thank the moments of innocence… That I remember on this very day. Thank you. (Written for a personal friend to whom I spoke on the phone with for many years – you know who you are). "Thank you by LeD ZepLiN" SingMia [Edited 1/6/05 14:02pm] [Edited 1/6/05 18:13pm] | |
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wow, im speechless. the imagery is crazy.  great poem. | |
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missmad said: wow, im speechless. the imagery is crazy.
great poem.It's a song that is played on the piano by me. All of them are... And also copy written under my personal company. But thank you for your ... "highly interesting" comments... One ? HOW COME YOUR MAD? MISS? Thanks SingMia | |
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Has this been recorded, cause im interested on how this would sound
The lyrics are a tad too perfect for it to be a song, thats why i ask but as for the Content, its a great poem, a little Hallmarky( cliche ) at times but its very very very good you have a good use of words, but you need work on rhyming i know i use to do the same crap Example Rhyming "Truth With true" this is in a Poetic term horrible, in songs your free to do that but you always get some asshole (like me) that'll get you on that i also have to say that if you are planning on writing Rhymes make sure every Stanza or verse rhymes i say this cause your second to last stanza doesn't rhyme at all breaking the sequence and the flow of the whole work you may not think its important now, but in the end, people will dog ya for it... But in its entirity its great i would love to hear it [Edited 1/7/05 11:13am] | |
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Luv4oneanotha said: Has this been recorded, cause im interested on how this would sound
The lyrics are a tad too perfect for it to be a song, thats why i ask but as for the Content, its a great poem, a little Hallmarky( cliche ) at times but its very very very good you have a good use of words, but you need work on rhyming i know i use to do the same crap Example Rhyming "Truth With true" this is in a Poetic term horrible, in songs your free to do that but you always get some asshole (like me) that'll get you on that i also have to say that if you are planning on writing Rhymes make sure every Stanza or verse rhymes i say this cause your second to last stanza doesn't rhyme at all breaking the sequence and the flow of the whole work you may not think its important now, but in the end, people will dog ya for it... But in its entirity its great i would love to hear it [Edited 1/7/05 11:13am] I REALLY APPRECIATE YOUR INPUT... Thank you. SingMia [Edited 1/7/05 13:57pm] | |
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Take Care
SingMia [Edited 1/7/05 14:05pm] | |
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"The lyrics are a tad too perfect for it to be a song, thats why i ask", as Luv4oneanotha said.
True love is supposed to be perfect the Purest State of Perfection in Love via GOD. I appreciate that comment; however, I'm blushing on that statement a bit. Thanks. I am now stoppping the responses from myself on this one;due to the fact, I am tired of seeing what I am writing. Thank you. SingMia | |
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Haha,
your a funny cat,  | |
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respectful said: "The lyrics are a tad too perfect for it to be a song, thats why i ask", as Luv4oneanotha said.
True love is supposed to be perfect the Purest State of Perfection in Love via GOD. I appreciate that comment; however, I'm blushing on that statement a bit. Thanks. I am now stoppping the responses from myself on this one;due to the fact, I am tired of seeing what I am writing. Thank you. SingMia Straight Jacket Funk Affair
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WOW 1 of ur best Singmia 
keep them coming. Beautiful  | |
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