Hi everyone,

I'm in a band - we are called Aristocrash

Check out www.aristocrash.com

I had a big argument with one of my fellow band members last night because of one song we have called Pay to Play

I would be very grateful if you could go on our website, check out the song and give an honest opinion.

I know it needs reworking but i don't wont to throw it away completely.

cheers
Paulinex

mmmm
as honest as i can be
the lyrics need to reworked,, it doesn't actually flow well with the riffs
Perhaps you should create a bridge, where the music builds up
cause its kinda dull
and tell the vocalist if she can, to screech the lyrics
like a freddie mercury
thats all i got bro
but it has potential, doesn't need to be thrown away
just make use of that riff and develop the song

Definitely agree on this. The lyrics just seem to go on for way too long without much else changing, so, as a listener, I get bored very quickly.

After 4 lines, there should be something else to happen - either some instrumental break between the next verse, a bomb goes off, mom bakes a cake, SOMETHING. Also, really the song sounds like a long long tirade without any stops... just sing sing sing sing, no stops for the band to riff it up or whatever. You gotta put stop air in there somewhere. Just my opinion, but hey, what do I know, I'm dead tired.

I like the song I especially love the voice. The only thing I would have done is mix the guitar just a tad lower. I think Aristocrash is a good band. Song sticks in my head.

Thanks fellas,

Hopefully we can take these ideas and create something cool.

any more comments welcome


xxx p

liked it. clean recording.