.....sum of u mite know wot happened 2 me over the past days, (V-day) i didn't know how 2 get my feelings out so i posted wot was up on here, but still i needed 2 get them out, so i wrote a poem, its not great, but its how i feel, im not a poem writer, and have never really done it before, but have wrote sum after. so this is it.

ALL I CAN GIVE U

I feel so lonely
Without u near
I cry every minute when we R apart
Theirs nothing in this world I want more
Just fill this lonely heart

I can wait a whole life time
Till U R in these arms of mine
24/7 dreaming of u
I wish we never part

I loved U from the very beginning
My heart won’t stop wanting U
U make me so happy
I need U 2 feel the same 2


I want to tell U all the time
How beautiful life has been
Since you’ve been mine
I can’t stop loving U no matter what
U mean the world 2 me
And I’m not going to let us 2 drop.

I could never share u with another
Cause u mean the world 2 me
And this comes from the heart
I promise I’ll give u all I can
&
All I can give u
Is LOVE!
[This message was edited Tue Feb 17 15:31:28 2004 by andykeen]

That Was Beautiful


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[This message was edited Tue Feb 17 16:18:23 2004 by LatinaAngel]

It's a good attempt and a neat concept but it seems like you took Prince lyrics and rewrote them. You even copied his writing style. You need to search for YOUR voice.

lovemachine said:

i have used PRINCE way of writing, but i dnt fink i have taken PRINCE's lyrics, this came from the heart.

You must be feeling really bad.

BinaryJustin said:

yea i just felt like no1, wanted me, i couldn't tell nobody how i was feeling, but now i feel stronger, its wierd, being so upset, 2 no being ok about it.

but i still think about her