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NEED SOME FEEDBACK… OKAY GUYS I KNOW I'M SUPPOSED TO BE ON BREAK, BUT AFTER WRITING THIS I JUST COULDN'T RESIST. I’VE BEEN WORKING ON THIS STORY AND I NOW I NEED SOME FEEDBACK, FROM YOU GUYS. BEFORE YOU BEGIN TO READ THIS STORY DOESN’T HAVE A TITLE YET AND IT STARTS FROM THE MIDDLE. IT’S ABOUT THIS LADY WHO’S AT THE BEGINNING STAGES OF HAVING THIS SEX AFFAIR ON HER HUSBAND. THE CHARECTORS ARE YOUNG LIKE IN THEIR TWENTIES, THE SCENE TAKES PLACE IN A BAR THE GUY CHARACTER OWNS. … OKAY SO LET ME SHUT UP AND LET Y’ALL READ… NEED HONEST OPINNONS PEOPLE.
He slammed me against the wall, then started to unbuckle my pants. I kept trying to stop him “Stop Nate, We Can’t do this, Stop Nate, We Can’t do this”. He ignored my cries, because deep in my eyes they spoke of something else. Even though I was trying to stop him, I wanted him. I wanted him every since that night, this time I wasn’t going to let him get away, but I couldn’t give into him without putting up a fight. For some reason I wanted to believe he understood that. He Knew I wanted him, but couldn’t give it to him right away. The more we fought over this passion, the more it turned me on, until I just couldn’t take it anymore. He kissed my lips. I pushed away, he fought his way back to kiss my lips again, then I slapped him. He grab my hand held me against the wall and then begin to rip all of my clothes off. I was afraid that somebody was going to walk in and assume I was being raped, but that wasn’t the case at all. This time when I felt his lips push up against mines, he slipped his tongue in and I let him. My pants came down, then my panties and I felt him spread my legs open. My heart started pounding 50 mls per minute, blood rushed through my vines, I could feel his hardness lay up against my thighs. He didn’t rush it in like my guys would’ve, he just let his hands do most of the job until I started to get wet, then he turned me around, rammed his hardness inside and started to fuck me from behind. It wasn’t sweet like how me and Ethan made love, it was angry. It was like Nate was trying to punish me for not giving in so easily at the beginning. He grab my hair and showed no mercy. He went inside of me deeply, I never felt such a sensation and that’s when I begin to moan out loud. He lean up against me even closer and when I felt his breath behind my neck, realizing it wasn’t Ethan’s , I begin to cry. Truth is it was a roller coaster of mixed emotions, that couldn’t stay in any longer. The more I cried, the angrier Nate looked and thrust his hip into mines “Shut up Bitch, you’re gonna get what you deserve” I heard his voice say. I tried to stop the tears, but they kept falling down my face. All of sudden I heard Nate voice moan out loud and knew he was coming to a end. Truth is I was a little upset, because I didn’t want him to stop, I wanted him to keep right on going. He turned me around, then started to kiss me again. “I bet he doesn’t make love you to like that” , I looked Nate straight in the eye and couldn’t say anything. “He doesn’t know you’re panties are going to always belong to me” he started to dress me, and I stopped crying. Part of what he said was true, which is the reason why I so upset with myself, I didn’t want it to be this way, but there was always something about Nate I just couldn’t resist no matter how many times I’ve tried or who I was with. Maybe this was just inside of my mind, but it seemed as if he knew my body more then I knew it myself, therefore I always trusted it him with it. He might’ve had a control over me sexually, but I knew deep down inside, he knew deep down inside, my heart belonged to Ethan’s, which is the reason why he gave it to me rough. He was Jealous. | |
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Lisa!! | |
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2the9s said: Lisa!!
yeah I'm still a virgin | |
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DigitalLisa said: 2the9s said: Lisa!!
yeah I'm still a virgin That's not what I meant! But I appreciate the update! Are you okay lately?? | |
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Wrong forum you little minx! | |
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2the9s said: DigitalLisa said: 2the9s said: Lisa!!
yeah I'm still a virgin That's not what I meant! But I appreciate the update! Are you okay lately?? yeah I'm fine, I figured out what the problem was, but it's gonna be fixed, everything is cool, hopefully | |
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iiiAye carumba!!! No hablo espanol,no!
Pero hablo ingles..ssii muy muy bien... "Come into my world..." Missy Quote of da Month: "yeah, sure, that's cool...wait WHAT?! " | |
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althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction | |
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DigitalLisa said: 2the9s said: DigitalLisa said: 2the9s said: Lisa!!
yeah I'm still a virgin That's not what I meant! But I appreciate the update! Are you okay lately?? yeah I'm fine, I figured out what the problem was, but it's gonna be fixed, everything is cool, hopefully You've been saying that for days! What's going on with you? | |
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DigitalLisa said: althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction YOU WHORE! | |
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lilmissmissy said: iiiAye carumba!!!
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Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction YOU WHORE! Just staying in charector, does this story say hustle or hot steamy romance ? | |
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DigitalLisa said: Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction YOU WHORE! Just staying in charector, does this story say hustle or hot steamy romance ? It says you're a damn FREAK :LOL: | |
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DigitalLisa said: Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction YOU WHORE! Just staying in charector, does this story say hustle or hot steamy romance ? It's actually pretty violent! | |
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Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction YOU WHORE! Just staying in charector, does this story say hustle or hot steamy romance ? It says you're a damn FREAK :LOL: ;)only in mind Just 2 think this is only the beginning | |
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2the9s said: DigitalLisa said: Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction YOU WHORE! Just staying in charector, does this story say hustle or hot steamy romance ? It's actually pretty violent! it's supposed to be a rough sex scene, she wanted him, but since she was married, she had to fight it, it's really all symbolized [This message was edited Wed Jan 7 19:19:45 PST 2004 by DigitalLisa] | |
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DigitalLisa said: Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction YOU WHORE! Just staying in charector, does this story say hustle or hot steamy romance ? It says you're a damn FREAK :LOL: ;)only in mind Just 2 think this is only the beginning Oh lawrd I hate to see what you're gonna be like when you finally do get a shot, that's all were gonna hear about for months. :LOL: | |
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Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: Paisley said: DigitalLisa said: althom said: Wrong forum you little minx!
@althom's reaction @paisley reaction YOU WHORE! Just staying in charector, does this story say hustle or hot steamy romance ? It says you're a damn FREAK :LOL: ;)only in mind Just 2 think this is only the beginning Oh lawrd I hate to see what you're gonna be like when you finally do get a shot, that's all were gonna hear about for months. :LOL: true | |
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