XxAxX said:

retina said:

Unfortunately I don't have the time to read a book at the moment but good on you for completing it! Like NDRU said most so-called professional writers talk all their lives about writing a whole novel but never actually do it.

It looks like you have a professional-looking cover designed for it and you obviously have a whole website dedicated to it, so why not sell proper hardcover (or paperback for that matter) versions as well? Those who enjoy the free online version might want to give away an actual physical book as a gift to their friends (perhaps you could include a short story or something as an incentive for those who pay). There are plenty of cheap printing services these days that are prepared to do very limitied editions.

Again, congratulations!

well, it's a give-away to benefit the Animal Humane Society. thanks for your feedback though! appreciate that you took the time!

So give the profits to them then. It's just another way of helping their cause (and a nice bonus for you to be able to say that people have paid for your work).

XxAxX said:

NDRU said:

if it's okay with your GF, that is thanks again for taking the time!!!!!

she doesn't want her own kids, so she'd probaby be okay with it

NDRU said:

XxAxX said:

if it's okay with your GF, that is thanks again for taking the time!!!!!

she doesn't want her own kids, so she'd probaby be okay with it

How do you feel about that?

XxAxX said:

NDRU said:

There are a couple things that you could edit to make it just a bit more perfect, IMO.

I am not suggesting changing the story or re-arranging sections, but there are some simple grammatical & consistency issues that I noticed (some of which may be personal taste) that I could share if you'd like.

i'd love some feedback!

Let me look, I had a couple notes. They came mostly at the beginning and end, as I found myself just enjoying the middle

retina said:

NDRU said:

she doesn't want her own kids, so she'd probaby be okay with it

How do you feel about that?

I don't want her kids either!

Seriously, it's one important issue we agree upon. No plans to have kids

the best 29.95 Ive ever spent!!

BlackAdder7 said:

If I weren't married *I'd* bear Xx's children

awwww you are my favorite BlackAdder in the whole wide world, you know that??????

NDRU said:

XxAxX said:

i'd love some feedback!

Let me look, I had a couple notes. They came mostly at the beginning and end, as I found myself just enjoying the middle

wild. thanks!

retina said:

XxAxX said:

well, it's a give-away to benefit the Animal Humane Society. thanks for your feedback though! appreciate that you took the time!

So give the profits to them then. It's just another way of helping their cause (and a nice bonus for you to be able to say that people have paid for your work).

thank you, great idea! might just do that

XxAxX said:

retina said:

So give the profits to them then. It's just another way of helping their cause (and a nice bonus for you to be able to say that people have paid for your work).

thank you, great idea! might just do that

What's the for? Are you being sarcastic? lol

retina said:

XxAxX said:

thank you, great idea! might just do that

What's the for? Are you being sarcastic? lol

no, just thinking about the hassles of publishing for money.....

XxAxX said:

retina said:

What's the for? Are you being sarcastic? lol

no, just thinking about the hassles of publishing for money.....

^ it's much more fun and easier to just do it oneself.

XxAxX said:

XxAxX said:

no, just thinking about the hassles of publishing for money.....

^ it's much more fun and easier to just do it oneself.

yeah, no. you won't get out of this tight spot. a can't be easily explained like that.

BlackAdder7 said:

XxAxX said:

^ it's much more fun and easier to just do it oneself.

yeah, no. you won't get out of this tight spot. a can't be easily explained like that.

okay, all right. it's my understanding that publishing inevitably leads to that point where a person finds themselves sitting at a folding table in a bookstore with a line of strangers waiting and staring at one. and, upon reaching that folding table point, a person must smile and smile and smile and greet people with a cheery demeanor and a thank you and answer personal questions and tell people about the how and why of it all and sign books and, well, for crying out loud!!! WHO wants to go there???! who?

besides, writing is for crazy people. = writers. think about it. a writer is a person who spends more time in their own imagination, spends time with made-up people, than they do with, say, their actual spouse or other significant others. a day spent writing is often a day spent in obsessive contemplation of one's own imaginary navel, and the tiny people/characters who live there. a person who spends that much time in their own imagination likely needs therapy at the end of a long writing day.

surely you can see this too???

thank you, that is all

XxAxX said:

NDRU said:

Let me look, I had a couple notes. They came mostly at the beginning and end, as I found myself just enjoying the middle

wild. thanks!

I sent you an orgnote, I hope you'll still love me!

XxAxX said:

BlackAdder7 said:

yeah, no. you won't get out of this tight spot. a can't be easily explained like that.

okay, all right. it's my understanding that publishing inevitably leads to that point where a person finds themselves sitting at a folding table in a bookstore with a line of strangers waiting and staring at one. and, upon reaching that folding table point, a person must smile and smile and smile and greet people with a cheery demeanor and a thank you and answer personal questions and tell people about the how and why of it all and sign books and, well, for crying out loud!!! WHO wants to go there???! who?

besides, writing is for crazy people. = writers. think about it. a writer is a person who spends more time in their own imagination, spends time with made-up people, than they do with, say, their actual spouse or other significant others. a day spent writing is often a day spent in obsessive contemplation of one's own imaginary navel, and the tiny people/characters who live there. a person who spends that much time in their own imagination likely needs therapy at the end of a long writing day.

surely you can see this too???

thank you, that is all

Wow.

You're making it much more dramatic than it needs to be. There's nothing magical that suddenly happens when you sell physical books instead of give them away online. You won't suddenly become a celebrity and a slave to your creativity just because you try another format! And no, your life won't suddenly implode and make you obsessive, lonely, phony and crazy and all the other stuff you're imagining either. At least no more and no less than you already are. lol

All it'll do to you is give you a bit more administrative work, and hopefully earn you (or the charity of your choice) some money.

But it's up to you of course. Nobody is forcing you to try it.

retina said:

XxAxX said:

okay, all right. it's my understanding that publishing inevitably leads to that point where a person finds themselves sitting at a folding table in a bookstore with a line of strangers waiting and staring at one. and, upon reaching that folding table point, a person must smile and smile and smile and greet people with a cheery demeanor and a thank you and answer personal questions and tell people about the how and why of it all and sign books and, well, for crying out loud!!! WHO wants to go there???! who?

besides, writing is for crazy people. = writers. think about it. a writer is a person who spends more time in their own imagination, spends time with made-up people, than they do with, say, their actual spouse or other significant others. a day spent writing is often a day spent in obsessive contemplation of one's own imaginary navel, and the tiny people/characters who live there. a person who spends that much time in their own imagination likely needs therapy at the end of a long writing day.

surely you can see this too???

thank you, that is all

Wow.

You're making it much more dramatic than it needs to be. There's nothing magical that suddenly happens when you sell physical books instead of give them away online. You won't suddenly become a celebrity and a slave to your creativity just because you try another format! And no, your life won't suddenly implode and make you obsessive, lonely, phony and crazy and all the other stuff you're imagining either. At least no more and no less than you already are. lol

All it'll do to you is give you a bit more administrative work, and hopefully earn you (or the charity of your choice) some money.

But it's up to you of course. Nobody is forcing you to try it.

thank you for the kind words! i do appreciate your support.

speaking of obsessive, lonely, crazy and all i'm in the story myself. see if you can pick me out

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So how long does it take to create something like this?

NDRU said:

So how long does it take to create something like this?

well, this project began back in mid-July. i spent a couple of weeks plotting it while packing to move, then the actual writing took two months, off and on. it was originally intended to be much longer, and darker. more scenes were to have taken place in sumeria, with a full-scale battle.

but, i had more fun with a comedic bent, so i shortened the war bits right out and poof! quickie

XxAxX said:

NDRU said:

So how long does it take to create something like this?

well, this project began back in mid-July. i spent a couple of weeks plotting it while packing to move, then the actual writing took two months, off and on. it was originally intended to be much longer, and darker. more scenes were to have taken place in sumeria, with a full-scale battle.

but, i had more fun with a comedic bent, so i shortened the war bits right out and poof! quickie

have you written others?

NDRU said:

XxAxX said:

well, this project began back in mid-July. i spent a couple of weeks plotting it while packing to move, then the actual writing took two months, off and on. it was originally intended to be much longer, and darker. more scenes were to have taken place in sumeria, with a full-scale battle.

but, i had more fun with a comedic bent, so i shortened the war bits right out and poof! quickie

have you written others?

a few.

XxAxX said:

NDRU said:

have you written others?

a few. war and peace, a tale of two cities, and a little toss away book I like to call the Bible

by the way, I was told by your customer service agent that if I paid the 29.95, i'd receive an autographed picture of you, as well as commemorative oven mitts. I was looking forward to using them on Thursday. To date, I haven't received them.

BlackAdder7 said:

XxAxX said:

a few. war and peace, a tale of two cities, and a little toss away book I like to call the Bible

i wrote a little story called the kamasutra. it has pictures. do any of your books have pictures?

no. i wish!

BlackAdder7 said:

by the way, I was told by your customer service agent that if I paid the $29.95 I'd receive a coupon for a professional car wash and wax redeemable at the local car wash.

Instead i got some weird old coot who ran out and blocked traffic by standing in front of my car while he spit-shined my windshield with his sleeve (as if that helped any). I really don't think you should use such deceptive advertising practices, Xx. Just saying.

see, warranty disclaimer

XxAxX said:

BlackAdder7 said:

by the way, I was told by your customer service agent that if I paid the $29.95 I'd receive a coupon for a professional car wash and wax redeemable at the local car wash.

Instead i got some weird old coot who ran out and blocked traffic by standing in front of my car while he spit-shined my windshield with his sleeve (as if that helped any). I really don't think you should use such deceptive advertising practices, Xx. Just saying.

see, warranty disclaimer

yes well from here on in, I'll no longer be buying your books from stores that have your name on the front signs. AND they mispelled your name as well!! I mean I was so excited when I saw a store in the middle of Times Square with your name on it, and it was so inviting! COME IN it said,

lots of XXX Books and movies! Who knew you were a cinema star as well. I pointed out to the manager that you were my friend, and that they spelled your name wrong, that its XxAxX, not XXX, but he didn't seem to care. I think you should address this with him right away. Furthermore, there were some scary customers there as well! apparently they don't know much about fashion because some of them..well you could see their pants didnt fit because they had fallen down to their ankles. I could tell because the dressing room curtains only went down to about their knees. Funny, I didn't see any of your books there....and the spelling of the titles they did have!!

"Come" was mispelled on each and every title.

BlackAdder7 said:

XxAxX said:

see, warranty disclaimer

I have a naughty side

it's okay i won't spank hard

XxAxX said:

BlackAdder7 said:

I have a naughty side

it's okay i won't spank hard

I'm glad your here. the binding on my 29.95$ copy fell apart and the pages fluttered all over manhattan as if it were V-E day. I would like a refund please. and you also promised naughty bits, of which there were none.

BlackAdder7 said:

XxAxX said:

it's okay i won't spank hard

I'm glad your here. the binding on my 29.95$ copy fell apart and the pages fluttered all over manhattan as if it were V-E day. I would like a refund please. and you also promised naughty bits, of which there were none.

the binding is supposed to fall apart. it is a reminder of how transient life is, and how one must carpe the download while one can. as for the naughty bits, i'm copying and pasting bits of this thread right in. i think it flows nicely

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