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Poetry Hello. I wanna write a poem to this girl i like for valentines day, but i dunno where to start.  Who here can give me some pointers? | |
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funkycat00 said: Hello. I wanna write a poem to this girl i like for valentines day, but i dunno where to start.
Who here can give me some pointers?Roses are red and violets are blue thats always a good start.... I know not much help never was one to be able to write poetry how about just describing what she means to you or how beautiful she is?  insatiable3: how can i cure my hangover?
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funkycat00 said: Hello. I wanna write a poem to this girl i like for valentines day, but i dunno where to start.
Who here can give me some pointers?Write from your heart 
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compare her to a flower say she looks like the first spring rose tell her she thrills your heart like a rainbow write about the color of her eyes use paper of her favorite pastel tone imagine her running in a field of daffodils don't forget to use the word love you will know how write it, if your heart's into the compose. "just do it."  Live life as though each moment is as precious & beautiful as a rainbow after a spring rain. b positive, creative, kind, productive, resourceful & respectful of humankind, & feel free 2 know that U-R-A  . i can feel it when u shine on me | |
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You're like Persephone in winter,
carried away by a jealous god, who seeks to keep your radiance, all to himself, and none other, A daughter who longs to let honey soaked rays, warm her skin again, To steal away in spring's majesty with Demeter, A worried, tearful, eager mother. You're like an ocean crest, a forest crackle, Whippoorwill'song, that bridges the silence between us. You're like an ocean crest, a cyclone , a stiff breeze, a vortex with your lips around my penis. your lips around my penis. your lips around my penis... --imago . [Edited 2/10/10 8:47am] | |
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I'm sorry, that was beautiful. | |
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TheVoid said: You're like Persephone in winter,
carried away by a jealous god, who seeks to keep your radiance, all to himself, and none other, A daughter who longs to let honey soaked rays, warm her skin again, To steal away in spring's majesty with Demeter, A worried, tearful, eager mother. You're like an ocean crest, a forest crackle, Whippoorwill'song, that bridges the silence between us. You're like an ocean crest, a cyclone , a stiff breeze, a vortex with your lips around my penis. your lips around my penis. your lips around my penis... --imago . [Edited 2/10/10 8:47am] She'd probably appreciate it more if sent b4 V-day...I would | |
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funkycat00 said: Hello. I wanna write a poem to this girl i like for valentines day, but i dunno where to start.
Who here can give me some pointers?Did you ever end up with anything? | |
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TheVoid said: You're like Persephone in winter,
carried away by a jealous god, who seeks to keep your radiance, all to himself, and none other, A daughter who longs to let honey soaked rays, warm her skin again, To steal away in spring's majesty with Demeter, A worried, tearful, eager mother. You're like an ocean crest, a forest crackle, Whippoorwill'song, that bridges the silence between us. You're like an ocean crest, a cyclone , a stiff breeze, a vortex with your lips around my penis. your lips around my penis. your lips around my penis... --imago . [Edited 2/10/10 8:47am] MY COUSIN WORKS IN A PHARMACY AND SHE SAID THEY ENEMA'D PRANCE INTO OBLIVION WITH FENTONILS!! | |
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Some important points... call her by name,be sincere, tell her you love her(but only if you really do), and be sweet.
The rest is up to you.... | |
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FauxReal said: funkycat00 said: Hello. I wanna write a poem to this girl i like for valentines day, but i dunno where to start.
Who here can give me some pointers?Did you ever end up with anything? Yeah, I'm up right now working on it. I'm kinda stuck 
When I see you . I feel sad. I want to tell you how I feel, but I turn away. It pains me I can’t put the right words say. The thoughts that play threw me day to day. When I hear your name, I feel fragile. I want to be with you so much I can’t help dream. Dream of holding you in these arms of mine full of warmth, and love. Caressing that long wavy hair I oh so adore. Every day, I want you. More, and more. Your laugher brightens my day. Your smile, and your shyly “hey”. | |
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I just opened a business doing this if you'd like some help.  . Nice to meet you by the way.
[Edited 2/11/10 22:00pm] [Edited 2/16/10 2:02am] | |
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I made a few corrections as far as grammar/syntax so it looks a little more presentable with what you have so far. There are some spelling mistakes and missing words that make it slightly cumbersome as it is written. Don't mean any offense by this...edits are in parentheses.
funkycat00 said: FauxReal said: Did you ever end up with anything? Yeah, I'm up right now working on it. I'm kinda stuck
When I see you . I feel sad. I want to tell you how I feel, but I turn away. It pains me I can’t put (find?) the right words (to) say. The thoughts that play (through) me day to day. When I hear your name, I feel fragile. I want to be with you so much I can’t help (but?) dream. Dream of holding you in these arms of mine full of warmth, and love. Caressing that long wavy hair I oh so adore. Every day, I want you. More, and more. Your laugh(t)er brightens my day. Your smile, and your shyly “hey”.(<---Not sure what to make of this last line) [Edited 2/11/10 22:04pm] | |
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Thanks! I'm really tired right now.  | |
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Your rack has a knack
It makes me pack in my slacks If you know what I mean And you've seen in my jeans What I'm packing ain't lacking I mean I'm already hung But when you get me sprung It's like Yao Ming, standing In a child's tent, There's tension, is what I meant And I should mention Since it's Valentine's Day not Lent You deserve a good serve And you'll get many tonight Shit, your whole body is tight.  MY COUSIN WORKS IN A PHARMACY AND SHE SAID THEY ENEMA'D PRANCE INTO OBLIVION WITH FENTONILS!! | |
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TheVoid said: You're like Persephone in winter,
carried away by a jealous god, who seeks to keep your radiance, all to himself, and none other, A daughter who longs to let honey soaked rays, warm her skin again, To steal away in spring's majesty with Demeter, A worried, tearful, eager mother. You're like an ocean crest, a forest crackle, Whippoorwill'song, that bridges the silence between us. You're like an ocean crest, a cyclone , a stiff breeze, a vortex with your lips around my penis. your lips around my penis. your lips around my penis... --imago . [Edited 2/10/10 8:47am]  | |
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