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I need a final opinion ... before showing my translation work to my father in law.
Could you please peeps tell me if the whole damn thing is written in proper english? Admittance :
All pets have to be identified by earmark or microship. Your dog has to be vaccinated since more than 15 days and less than one year against the following diseases: Canine distemper, parvovirosis, Rubarth hepatitys, leptospirosis. Your cat has to be vaccinated since more than 15 days and less than one year against the following diseases: Typhus fever, coryza, chlamidiosis, leukemia. Innoculation against rabies isn’t necessary but strongly advised. Veterinarian certificate and walking kit (lead and collar) is required for each pet upon arrival 1st category dogs aren’t allowed in the kennel Aggressive dogs, sick dogs or badly injured dogs aren’t allowed in the kennel Dogs and cats hosted in our kennel have to be treated against fleas and wormed. Should it be otherwise each animal will receive these treatments at the owner fees. The way we work: The kennel is open everyday by appointment Making a reservation is strongly advised as the number of rooms is limited (we can put heat in rooms on extra charge) You can drop off or collect your pet each day of the week during opening time The length of the stay is deducted from half-day Payment terms : a 50% deposit will be required when checking in, as the balance is required when collecting. For any stay over one month the payment will be required per advance Pets are fed in the evening (kibbles) unless otherwise stated, they also get unlimited fresh water renewed several times/day. Dogs are walked 3 times/day, set free in a completely secured space or walked on a leash while room cleaning. Cats dispose of a secured room where they can relax and play all they want. We visit them several times a day and stay by their side to entertain them. Our customers are committed to divulge in the contract any risk which can be involved by the animal, especially in emotional and physiological areas. In case of illness or accident the kennel manager is committed to cure the animal but can’t be held responsible in case of death. If needed, pets are taken to the kennel appointed vet . In the case the owner will be charged for treatment fees. In case the total stay cost isn’t paid as the pet is picked up, the kennel is allowed to practice retention law until final payment. Our customers are required to give us their holiday home address or relatives data is the event of any problem with the animal For your pet confort you can bring with him his favourites toys as well as his personal bedding, clean and disinfected In the event of protest or disputation, the case will be transferred to Auch civil court. Is there any place of refuge one can flee from this insanity | |
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Your dog has to be vaccinated since more than 15 days and less than one year against the following diseases:
That can be written in a more clear manner like this: Your dog has to be vaccinated if they are older than 15 days and younger than 1 year ... same with the cat one. Veterinarian certificate and walking kit (lead and collar) is required for each pet upon arrival A veterinarian certificate and walking kit ( lead and collar) are... 1st category dogs aren’t allowed in the kennel change the aren't to are not Aggressive dogs, sick dogs or badly injured dogs aren’t allowed in the kennel Aggressive , sick or badly injured dogs are not allowed in the kennel. The kennel is open everyday by appointment Making a reservation is strongly advised as the number of rooms is limited (we can put heat in rooms on extra charge) Either use reservation or appointment- im assuming this is to go up somewhere will be easier for people if u stick to one word. the number of rooms is limited the number of rooms are limited You can drop off or collect your pet each day of the week during opening time add an s on the end of opening time: opening times The length of the stay is deducted from half-day- what do you mean here? more to come | |
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Payment terms : a 50% deposit will be required when checking in, as the balance is required when collecting.
Payment terms : a 50% deposit will be required when checking in and the outstanding amount is required when picking up. For any stay over one month the payment will be required per advance For stays over a month complete payment is required in advance Pets are fed in the evening (kibbles) unless otherwise stated, they also get unlimited fresh water renewed several times/day. Pets are fed kibbles in the evening unless otherwise stated, they also receive fresh water several times a day. Dogs are walked 3 times/day, set free in a completely secured space or walked on a leash while room cleaning. Is this what you mean? Below Dogs are walked 3 times/day and are either set free in a secured setting or are walked on a leash while the rooms are being cleaned more to come | |
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Oh man I can't believe I made so many mistakes!! Reading this just scares me!!
Thanks alot Miss Damn I bloody need to get some sleepzpzzzzz... Is there any place of refuge one can flee from this insanity | |
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Cats dispose of a secured room where they can relax and play all they want. We visit them several times a day and stay by their side to entertain them.
What do you mean by this? Our customers are committed to divulge in the contract any risk which can be involved by the animal, especially in emotional and physiological areas. Our customers are committed to divulge any risk with the animal including emotional and physiological areas. In case of illness or accident the kennel manager is committed to cure the animal but can’t be held responsible in case of death. In case of illness or an accident the kennel manager will do what is necessary to save the animal but is not held liable in the case of death. Our customers are required to give us their holiday home address or relatives data is the event of any problem with the animal Our customers are required to give us an emergency contact in the event of any problem with the animal. For your pet confort you can bring with him his favourites toys as well as his personal bedding, clean and disinfected For your pet comfort you can bring their favourite toys and personal bedding and all cleaning and disinfectant products | |
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MarySharon said: Oh man I can't believe I made so many mistakes!! Reading this just scares me!!
Thanks alot Miss Damn I bloody need to get some sleepzpzzzzz... u did fine honey! nothing to fret over. if i didn't include the line that means it was good. | |
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MarySharon said: ... All pets have to be identified by earmark or microship.
microchip | |
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PANDURITO said: MarySharon said: ... All pets have to be identified by earmark or microship.
microchip | |
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ZombieKitten said: PANDURITO said: microchip With a very special thank you to Tina: Is hammer already absolute, how much some people verändern...ICH hope is never so I will be! And if, then I hope that I would then have wen in my environment who joins me in the A.... | |
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ZombieKitten said: PANDURITO said: microchip Now he's telling me that translating the kennel rules won't be needed. He'd rather want me to translate some ad for the kennel... [Edited 2/13/09 23:45pm] Is there any place of refuge one can flee from this insanity | |
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MarySharon said: ZombieKitten said: Now he's telling me that translating the kennel rules won't be needed. He'd rather want me to translate some ad for the kennel... [Edited 2/13/09 23:45pm] damn!!!!! | |
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missmad said: MarySharon said: Now he's telling me that translating the kennel rules won't be needed. He'd rather want me to translate some ad for the kennel... [Edited 2/13/09 23:45pm] damn!!!!! Well actually the kennel rules translation will be of use in the future but he doesn't need it at the moment... Is there any place of refuge one can flee from this insanity | |
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Here's the final version of the ad:
Kennel and pets livery. We walk your dog daily in the beautiful landscapes of a 12.35 acres Land.
Individual stalls with closed rooms Cat kennel Including individual cages and secured room for proper confort. Open everyday Informations and reservations : +33 5 62 09 23 87 +33 6 70 06 81 60 Qualification licence number 32051 and 32052 Siret number 31*** Is there any place of refuge one can flee from this insanity | |
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Serious said: ZombieKitten said: | |
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MarySharon said: missmad said: damn!!!!! Well actually the kennel rules translation will be of use in the future but he doesn't need it at the moment... ah ok | |
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Steadwood said: Serious said: Too funny, right . With a very special thank you to Tina: Is hammer already absolute, how much some people verändern...ICH hope is never so I will be! And if, then I hope that I would then have wen in my environment who joins me in the A.... | |
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Serious said: Steadwood said: Too funny, right . The daft thing is I didn't see the mistake at first Mind you... I'm not too great with my English...and I'm English | |
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missmad said: Your dog has to be vaccinated since more than 15 days and less than one year against the following diseases:
That can be written in a more clear manner like this: Your dog has to be vaccinated if [b]they are older than 15 days and younger than 1 year ... same with the cat one. The italicised portion isn't right - what MarySharon means isn't the age of the dog/cat, it's to say that the dog/cat has to have been vaccinated earlier than 15 days but not earlier than a year before arriving at the kennel. It doesn't have anything to do with the age of the pet. You wouldn't put a 2 week puppy/kitten at a kennel anyway. | |
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And hepatitis. | |
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Teacher said: missmad said: Your dog has to be vaccinated since more than 15 days and less than one year against the following diseases:
That can be written in a more clear manner like this: Your dog has to be vaccinated if [b]they are older than 15 days and younger than 1 year ... same with the cat one. The italicised portion isn't right - what MarySharon means isn't the age of the dog/cat, it's to say that the dog/cat has to have been vaccinated earlier than 15 days but not earlier than a year before arriving at the kennel. It doesn't have anything to do with the age of the pet. You wouldn't put a 2 week puppy/kitten at a kennel anyway. U guessed right Thanks alot Is there any place of refuge one can flee from this insanity | |
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MarySharon said: Teacher said: The italicised portion isn't right - what MarySharon means isn't the age of the dog/cat, it's to say that the dog/cat has to have been vaccinated earlier than 15 days but not earlier than a year before arriving at the kennel. It doesn't have anything to do with the age of the pet. You wouldn't put a 2 week puppy/kitten at a kennel anyway. U guessed right Thanks alot No prob | |
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MarySharon said: Here's the final version of the ad:
Kennel and pets livery. We walk your dog daily in the beautiful landscapes of a 12.35 acres Land.
Individual stalls with closed rooms Cat kennel Including individual cages and secured room for proper confort. Open everyday Informations and reservations : +33 5 62 09 23 87 +33 6 70 06 81 60 Qualification licence number 32051 and 32052 Siret number 31*** I do proofreading and edit ads as part of my job. Kennel and Pets Livery Features: Individual stalls with closed rooms for all pets Cat kennel - including individual cages and secured room for proper comfort We will walk your dog daily in the beautiful landscape of 12.35 acres. Open everyday (do you want to put the times in here?) For information or reservations, please call +33 5 62 09 23 87 or +33 6 70 06 81 60 Qualification licence numbers 32051 and 32052 Siret number 31*** | |
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Heartfelt thank yous Apple
I had the feeling my father in law (who is polish) had a strange way to put it in french words but I had to follow his own logic for the translation. He doesn't want me to put the opening times either, he'd rather want people to call him instead Is there any place of refuge one can flee from this insanity | |
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Teacher said: missmad said: Your dog has to be vaccinated since more than 15 days and less than one year against the following diseases:
That can be written in a more clear manner like this: Your dog has to be vaccinated if [b]they are older than 15 days and younger than 1 year ... same with the cat one. The italicised portion isn't right - what MarySharon means isn't the age of the dog/cat, it's to say that the dog/cat has to have been vaccinated earlier than 15 days but not earlier than a year before arriving at the kennel. It doesn't have anything to do with the age of the pet. You wouldn't put a 2 week puppy/kitten at a kennel anyway. ah ok. my bad. thanks sweets | |
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MarySharon said: Heartfelt thank yous Apple
I had the feeling my father in law (who is polish) had a strange way to put it in french words but I had to follow his own logic for the translation. He doesn't want me to put the opening times either, he'd rather want people to call him instead You're very welcome - anytime. Do you want to include a sentence that says something like: "Please call for hours of operation" | |
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