Okay, y'all, I've recently been hit by the "love bug" and last nite I just completed a poem for my bf. Gimme your opinions!!!!! Okay, here goes:

Prelude
Two people,
Who seemed to be worlds and worlds apart,
Shared the same things all along
until………….

THE UNION – By Krystina Seastrunk

PART I
Together.
After months of waiting, fearing, flirting & guessing
Finally together.
That “music dude” and that “crazy chick”.

Our time, so far, has been short
But very, very sweet indeed!

Your hugs comfort me
Your kisses arouse me
And God knows what else does things to me (giggle)
When you touch me, in my mind I say,
“Immerse me in your love.
Wrap it all around me!
Take me into those big, strong arms
And MAKE ME KNOW that I’m yours!”

But I already know.

The way that you give your love speaks for itself.
But while I may,
I’ll request a few things
If you don’t mind…………

Please take heed of this
Though I’m no poet, songwriter or psalmist.

A relationship……….a bond is strong;
Filled with love, loyalty,
Devotion and trust.

Trust me, I’ll trust you.
Have my back, I’ll have yours.

No matter what the circumstance,
Don’t let the feeling fade:
If my hair falls out………..
If my teeth do the same………..
If I yell at you………..
And when the Kryptonite sets into my system each month,
and may poison my pure & happy thoughts into evil words and actions……………

Love me.


Also,
When I give to you
My “precious little gift”,
Don’t take advantage of her!
Because “she” is yet
The drop-----on the petal-----of the *rose that you picked.

Such a precious gift that is
Dear to me, as well as
Good to you, must not be USED, but cherished.


PART II
After years of being scarred
From constant battle with
Those of the opposite sex,

I found a good luck charm;
My healing ointment.
It’s no jewelry
No rabbit’s foot, no clovers,
Just Chris. MY Chris.

Old scars are simply healed, if not forgotten!
Chris, you truly are a gem.

And NO, I’m not saying this for my health!!!!!

UM, LAUGH………….OUT………….LOUD………………….

But seriously, I look forward
To great places, physical or imaginary
To new heights, and whatever
As long as we’re together.

Who knows,
One day, just maybe
We’ll stroll hand-in-hand,
Reminiscing on years back,


And then we’ll walk on off………………..
Into the sunset……………………..
Together.


Well, what do ya think?
[Edited 1/12/05 8:43am]

If you already say it is long and crappy.. well

a)why would we read it and

b) why ask our opinions?

Not crappy..

Very nice and heartfelt..

REDBABY said:

a) I dunno, why would you read it? You answer your own question.
b) I asked 4 opinions because I felt like it. I have no need to explain myself.

My fav poem for you

The error of our eye directs our mind.
What error leads, must err.
O, then conclude,
Minds sway'd by eyes are full of turpitide - Troilus and Cressida

i didn't have to but you can say thnk u

Ummm.....it is long!