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The longest, crappiest poem I've written........EVER! Okay, y'all, I've recently been hit by the "love bug" and last nite I just completed a poem for my bf. Gimme your opinions!!!!! Okay, here goes:
Prelude Two people, Who seemed to be worlds and worlds apart, Shared the same things all along until…………. THE UNION – By Krystina Seastrunk PART I Together. After months of waiting, fearing, flirting & guessing Finally together. That “music dude” and that “crazy chick”. Our time, so far, has been short But very, very sweet indeed! Your hugs comfort me Your kisses arouse me And God knows what else does things to me (giggle) When you touch me, in my mind I say, “Immerse me in your love. Wrap it all around me! Take me into those big, strong arms And MAKE ME KNOW that I’m yours!” But I already know. The way that you give your love speaks for itself. But while I may, I’ll request a few things If you don’t mind………… Please take heed of this Though I’m no poet, songwriter or psalmist. A relationship……….a bond is strong; Filled with love, loyalty, Devotion and trust. Trust me, I’ll trust you. Have my back, I’ll have yours. No matter what the circumstance, Don’t let the feeling fade: If my hair falls out……….. If my teeth do the same……….. If I yell at you……….. And when the Kryptonite sets into my system each month, and may poison my pure & happy thoughts into evil words and actions…………… Love me. Also, When I give to you My “precious little gift”, Don’t take advantage of her! Because “she” is yet The drop-----on the petal-----of the *rose that you picked. Such a precious gift that is Dear to me, as well as Good to you, must not be USED, but cherished. PART II After years of being scarred From constant battle with Those of the opposite sex, I found a good luck charm; My healing ointment. It’s no jewelry No rabbit’s foot, no clovers, Just Chris. MY Chris. Old scars are simply healed, if not forgotten! Chris, you truly are a gem. And NO, I’m not saying this for my health!!!!! UM, LAUGH………….OUT………….LOUD…………………. But seriously, I look forward To great places, physical or imaginary To new heights, and whatever As long as we’re together. Who knows, One day, just maybe We’ll stroll hand-in-hand, Reminiscing on years back, And then we’ll walk on off……………….. Into the sunset…………………….. Together. Well, what do ya think? [Edited 1/12/05 8:43am] They did WHAT??!....
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If you already say it is long and crappy.. well
a)why would we read it and b) why ask our opinions? if sexy was a colour it would be red | |
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Not crappy..
Very nice and heartfelt.. | |
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REDBABY said: If you already say it is long and crappy.. well
a)why would we read it and b) why ask our opinions? a) I dunno, why would you read it? You answer your own question. b) I asked 4 opinions because I felt like it. I have no need to explain myself. They did WHAT??!....
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My fav poem for you
The error of our eye directs our mind. What error leads, must err. O, then conclude, Minds sway'd by eyes are full of turpitide - Troilus and Cressida i didn't have to but you can say thnk u ... would you run to me if somebody hurt you, even if that somebody was me?
Welcome to "the org", NewFace… they can have you, but I'll have your love in the end. did I say an hour? My face is red, I stand corrected. if U feel alright, let me hear U | |
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Ummm.....it is long! | |
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