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haiku me haiku you

A haiku is a type of poem that had its origin in Japan. The poets there would make trips out to the wilderness to meditate and write these poems which had very strict rules: no title, three lines only, the first and last lines were to have exactly five syllables, while the middle line was to have seven syllables. Which made the whole poem have exactly seventeen beats and said something true about the beauty of the outdoors. In modern times haikus are now written about any subject. So what follows is my very first haiku, which took me about 10 minutes to write. It will be in a larger font in the very next post.

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Reply #1 posted 10/28/18 2:48pm

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first five syllables

then in the next line seven

then five syllables

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Reply #2 posted 10/29/18 2:41pm

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one two three four five

one two three four five six plus

one two three four five

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Reply #3 posted 11/03/18 9:26am

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five four three two one

negative numbers come next

minus one two three

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Reply #4 posted 11/03/18 9:27am

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i love my gal peg

tho she can run hot and cold

summer winter love

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Reply #5 posted 11/03/18 9:28am

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the holy bible

can and will save you if you

read chapter a day

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Reply #6 posted 11/03/18 9:30am

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i knew her just one

great sex time and then she went

and dumped me hard

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Reply #7 posted 11/03/18 9:31am

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you and michael man

lived in the same complex home

and now i am lone

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Reply #8 posted 11/03/18 9:34am

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Haiku withdrawn at the insistance of the person it was about.

[Edited 11/6/18 14:56pm]

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Reply #9 posted 11/03/18 9:35am

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The person this haiku was about has asked me to remove it.

[Edited 11/6/18 14:57pm]

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Reply #10 posted 11/03/18 9:36am

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To preserve the person's privacy I have taken out this haiku.

[Edited 11/6/18 14:58pm]

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Reply #11 posted 11/03/18 9:38am

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john assassina----

tion crippled me up

mentally split two

This haiku is about the assassination of John Lennon on December 8, 1980 and how shortly afterward I was diagnosed as a manic-depressive ("mentally split two"). Many years have passed since and I'm okay.

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Reply #12 posted 11/04/18 1:06am

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UNDERPLAYED

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Once there was a man

Whose songs were vital to the soul

Music still makes us whole

"If you're living, you've got nothing left to prove..."
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Reply #13 posted 11/06/18 3:06pm

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Sorry, purplethunder3121, but the rules of haiku writing is that the poem does not have a title, and that the first line has five syllables, the second line has seven syllables and the third line has five syllables. Your second line has eight syllables and your third line has six syllables.

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Reply #14 posted 11/06/18 3:07pm

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Keep writing though, it gets easier with practice.

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Reply #15 posted 11/06/18 4:54pm

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I LOVE the thread you
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I really think so
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Reply #16 posted 11/06/18 9:24pm

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7thday said:

Sorry, purplethunder3121, but the rules of haiku writing is that the poem does not have a title, and that the first line has five syllables, the second line has seven syllables and the third line has five syllables. Your second line has eight syllables and your third line has six syllables.

Yeah, that's what I get for doing it late at night... lol

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Reply #17 posted 11/10/18 11:25am

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As funky music played

a tear rolled down her wet cheek

he was gone, her Prince.

[Edited 11/10/18 11:26am]

It never ceases to amaze me how cruel humans can be against fellow humans and animals, especially when in the pursuit of money and power.
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Reply #18 posted 11/10/18 3:40pm

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maplenpg said:

As funky music played

a tear rolled down her wet cheek

he was gone, her Prince.

[Edited 11/10/18 11:26am]

Very nice, but your first line has six syllables... razz My mistake was counting words, not syllables. Haven't done Haiku in years...a great exercise in minimalism...

"If you're living, you've got nothing left to prove..."
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Reply #19 posted 11/10/18 4:07pm

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Singed feather wafts from

Lone tree emblazoned in black

Sole remnant of hell

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Reply #20 posted 11/10/18 4:14pm

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7thday said:

Keep writing though, it gets easier with practice.

I forgot how fun Haiku and other writing exercises are--thanks for the reminder. wink

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Reply #21 posted 11/11/18 12:56am

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Hope stirs souls within

Shivers rising in the wind

Portent of new dawn...

"If you're living, you've got nothing left to prove..."
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Reply #22 posted 11/11/18 1:01am

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purplethunder3121 said:



maplenpg said:


As funky music played


a tear rolled down her wet cheek


he was gone, her Prince.


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Very nice, but your first line has six syllables... razz My mistake was counting words, not syllables. Haven't done Haiku in years...a great exercise in minimalism...


Lol. You're right. I should have excluded 'As'. I'll try again later lol
It never ceases to amaze me how cruel humans can be against fellow humans and animals, especially when in the pursuit of money and power.
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Reply #23 posted 11/11/18 1:25am

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maplenpg said:

purplethunder3121 said:

Very nice, but your first line has six syllables... razz My mistake was counting words, not syllables. Haven't done Haiku in years...a great exercise in minimalism...

Lol. You're right. I should have excluded 'As'. I'll try again later lol

lol Feel ya.

"If you're living, you've got nothing left to prove..."
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Reply #24 posted 11/11/18 1:32am

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From dusk until dawn

Hope rises despite the flames

Life is left intact

"If you're living, you've got nothing left to prove..."
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Reply #25 posted 11/11/18 2:58am

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The guns fell silent

It had been one hundred years

We will not forget

It never ceases to amaze me how cruel humans can be against fellow humans and animals, especially when in the pursuit of money and power.
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Reply #26 posted 11/11/18 9:47pm

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maplenpg said:

The guns fell silent

It had been one hundred years

We will not forget

Nice! Too bad this part of the Org isn't as active as it used to be...

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